/ysg/ - Cynic Corner

>>1
But sometimes, it would be nicer to forget, no?

Happy 5th anni…

Knew he was a sentimental old man

Tsk
had some ideas for memes of "sleepy" Sero being for Biden and tan asshole NTR man obviously going for Trump, but they've all been dashed

It took enough elevenlabs credit to generate, so I'll repost it here…
Manuri's blog post explaining his thoughts on writing the Antagonist/NTR Guy/Heel, and why Yasagure Kitsuenjo games stick with having only one.
As read by an Elevenlabs clone of Yuki Chiyuri's Majetano voice, interpreting English.

Ugh, now that /hsg/ is mostly back to speed, I still have the rest of the place.

Since a fellow traveler was kind enough to drop a bunch of recs, I'd hate to see them fade away like so much other HSG ephemera
/ysg/, you're up!
>>>/hsg/24515
>>>/hsg/24624
>>>/hsg/24627

>>38
Maybe something based around these two
(As funny as it would be, I can't bring myself to have the MEAT one be Majetano sucking dick)

Family
FlamLie
I think that could be a worth pair of themes, too.　Ugh.

>>40
Even on /ysg/, I am next!

>>40
Something out of these?

>>42
A theme of Nostalgia versus Disappointment. Nyehehe.

>>23
Suno's take on Liedna's "Theme" produced a very apt image of Liedna's brain (at least Drosera would say so)

>>42
One down

>>45
Keeping it around as default here

Poor thing…

Quickly retrieve mana from scumbag.

>>48
Boggle vacantly at these grave sins.

The next heroine dons white, apparently.
Does this means she starts with even less experience, somehow?

Themin update

Actually, the year of the snake might be really auspicious.

>>51
I have little insight into her personality, struggles or circumstances so far, so it's hard to get attached (or excited, guhehe)
Demo when?

>>70
Nyeheh…
If the translation was something I was being officially paid to turn in, I definitely would've gone with "Mementos" there, as that carries that perfect twinge of death, nostalgia, loss while being memory focused.

But, since this was a private personal project, using 'Juju' for 呪物 felt too funny of a coincidence to overlook. They front-rhyme and everything!
Fellow Homestuck fans might awkwaaard at this, but it'll be a secret awkwaaard handshake.

I read chapter 1 and you didn't lie, it was heartfelt. A problem I have with most eroge is that if the story succeeds in making me care about the characters, I don't suddenly want to see them having sex or worse. This author seems to be aiming for that on purpose, so it's definitely not for me. I wouldn't say the story was worthwhile on its own since it's basically slice of life with nothing going on, with the thing that's supposed to keep the audience engaged being their expectation that the plot will eventually degenerate into porn. That said, I did enjoy what I read, laughed a few times, and cared about the protagonists, I assume this is top percentile writing by the standards of RPG Maker pornslop. At least it added context for some of the stickers.

The Hime part was cheap though, I assumed she was going to be a main character or something, to do that halfway through introducing her character was a surprise that made me immediately stop caring about her. She was exploited for the sake of the plot similar to how the other characters are sexually exploited. I think it could have worked better if Hime's fate was foreshadowed. I assume this game is unpopular because "who was the target audience", people who are just there to jerk off won't want to read all the text, and people interested in the story won't appreciate the fanservice shoehorned into the plot.

Wasn't always paying close attention and fast forwarded some parts but mistakes I noticed:
- Not entirely sure but I believe there was "As as" near the beginning, I don't have a screenshot
https://files.catbox.moe/h5kgug.png - missing period
https://files.catbox.moe/cypen8.png - I think "exact" is more correct here
https://files.catbox.moe/4p5lng.png - "we" capitalised
https://files.catbox.moe/vuagwx.png - "out chat"
https://files.catbox.moe/rnxypu.png - "I've love"
https://files.catbox.moe/h43te9.png - You can interact with this after the scene and it no longer makes sense. Not a TL issue, not sure if you can/want to fix this.
https://files.catbox.moe/w0z2yi.png - "I'm am"
https://files.catbox.moe/0wib9z.png - "them same"
https://files.catbox.moe/3msol9.png - spacing after ellipsis
https://files.catbox.moe/361z1k.png -

Your translation otherwise seemed good and conveyed the personalities of the speakers well. I'm guessing it wasn't easy to translate because the dialogue can be subtle. "Yes'm" stood out as a bit obscure but you clearly chose it for a reason so that's fine.

>>82
>>82

Excellent, this is it! You even did the side stories, it looks like!
"What has MoM ever done for me lately?"

Very glad could at least somewhat enjoy your time with the MacVell family. Given what they go through later, I replay those happy days at the start from time to time…

>"who was the target audience"
While the following is decent in Japan (45k dlsite followers), you're exactly right. A potential reader needs to have this very particular mix of cheap free time, idealism, and perversity to get invested… Limiting things to very strange people.
I'd love to simply write the author, Kashiwagi Manuri, off as a cynic only setting things up for a stronger shamewank later, but there's no way he could dedicate that much attention and effort into the world if it was all mere set dressing… I think he's actually some kind of embittered romantic that buries his sappiness under an NTR irony shield.

I'll tell you that chapter 2 only has a couple ctrl-skippable h-scenes (masturbation related) if you wanted to play a bit further to see the establishment of the game's plot…
But I appreciate enough of that you held your nose to see chapter one to the end. Especially if porn games aren't your cup of tea.

Now to get to amending those mistakes (and deleting the links so nobody else can see my shame…)

https://ci-en.dlsite.com/creator/3262/article/1332465

It's rather brief for a Manuri-post, eh? I feel bad for him, If he really can't even sit in a chair for an hour at a span. Hope my body always stays alright…