No.338
Happy 5th anni…
No.340
Tsk
had some ideas for memes of "sleepy" Sero being for Biden and tan asshole NTR man obviously going for Trump, but they've all been dashed
No.343
Since a fellow traveler was kind enough to drop a bunch of recs, I'd hate to see them fade away like so much other HSG ephemera
/ysg/, you're up!
>>>/hsg/24515
>>>/hsg/24624
>>>/hsg/24627
No.344
>>38Maybe something based around these two
(As funny as it would be, I can't bring myself to have the MEAT one be Majetano sucking dick)
No.345
Family
FlamLie
I think that could be a worth pair of themes, too. Ugh.
No.346
>>345Even on /ysg/, I am next!
No.348
>>347A theme of Nostalgia versus Disappointment. Nyehehe.
No.351
>>350Keeping it around as default here
No.356
Themin update
No.357
Actually, the year of the snake might be really auspicious.
No.358
>>355I have little insight into her personality, struggles or circumstances so far, so it's hard to get attached (or excited, guhehe)
Demo when?
No.359
>jujus
really wwrah? another wwoke tricksterlator
No.360
>>359Nyeheh…
If the translation was something I was being officially paid to turn in, I definitely would've gone with "Mementos" there, as that carries that perfect twinge of death, nostalgia, loss while being memory focused.
But, since this was a private personal project, using 'Juju' for 呪物 felt too funny of a coincidence to overlook. They front-rhyme and everything!
Fellow Homestuck fans might awkwaaard at this, but it'll be a secret awkwaaard handshake.
No.361
I read chapter 1 and you didn't lie, it was heartfelt. A problem I have with most eroge is that if the story succeeds in making me
care about the characters, I don't suddenly want to see them having sex or worse. This author seems to be aiming for that on purpose, so it's definitely not for me. I wouldn't say the story was worthwhile on its own since it's basically slice of life with nothing going on, with the thing that's supposed to keep the audience engaged being their expectation that the plot will eventually degenerate into porn. That said, I did enjoy what I read, laughed a few times, and
cared about the protagonists, I assume this is top percentile writing by the standards of RPG Maker pornslop. At least it added context for some of the stickers.
The Hime part was cheap though, I assumed she was going to be a main character or something, to do that halfway through introducing her character was a surprise that made me immediately stop
caring about her. She was exploited for the sake of the plot similar to how the other characters are sexually exploited. I think it could have worked better if Hime's fate was foreshadowed. I assume this game is unpopular because "who was the target audience", people who are just there to jerk off won't want to read all the text, and people interested in the story won't appreciate the fanservice shoehorned into the plot.
Wasn't always paying close attention and fast forwarded some parts but mistakes I noticed:
- Not entirely sure but I believe there was "As as" near the beginning, I don't have a screenshot
https://files.catbox.moe/h5kgug.png - missing period
https://files.catbox.moe/cypen8.png - I think "exact" is more correct here
https://files.catbox.moe/4p5lng.png - "we" capitalised
https://files.catbox.moe/vuagwx.png - "out chat"
https://files.catbox.moe/rnxypu.png - "I've love"
https://files.catbox.moe/h43te9.png - You can interact with this after the scene and it no longer makes sense. Not a TL issue, not sure if you can/want to fix this.
https://files.catbox.moe/w0z2yi.png - "I'm am"
https://files.catbox.moe/0wib9z.png - "them same"
https://files.catbox.moe/3msol9.png - spacing after ellipsis
https://files.catbox.moe/361z1k.png -
Your translation otherwise seemed good and conveyed the personalities of the speakers well. I'm guessing it wasn't easy to translate because the dialogue can be subtle. "Yes'm" stood out as a bit obscure but you clearly chose it for a reason so that's fine.
No.362
>>361>>361
Excellent, this is it! You even did the side stories, it looks like!
"What has MoM ever done for me lately?"
Very glad could at least somewhat enjoy your time with the MacVell family. Given what they go through later, I replay those happy days at the start from time to time…
>"who was the target audience"While the following is decent in Japan (45k dlsite followers), you're exactly right. A potential reader needs to have this very particular mix of cheap free time, idealism, and perversity to get invested… Limiting things to very strange people.
I'd love to simply write the author, Kashiwagi Manuri, off as a cynic only setting things up for a stronger shamewank later, but there's no way he could dedicate that much attention and effort into the world if it was all mere set dressing… I think he's actually some kind of embittered romantic that buries his sappiness under an NTR irony shield.
I'll tell you that chapter 2 only has a couple ctrl-skippable h-scenes (masturbation related) if you wanted to play a bit further to see the establishment of the game's plot…
But I appreciate enough of that you held your nose to see chapter one to the end. Especially if porn games aren't your cup of tea.
Now to get to amending those mistakes (and deleting the links so nobody else can see my shame…)
No.366
This next cien bonus is making me
No.367
>>366Maybe the realization that it might just be gen X irony after all.
No.377
>>376Wait, I'm just retarded and forget which way "southwest" is
No.378
>>340あんた、そんなミームのことばかり嘆いている暇があれば、私の魔学書でも読んでみなさい。真理の炎は政治の茶畜よりずっと熱いわよ。
No.381
>>380It's too dialed up, I mean.
"Please talk like a normal person."
No.383
I feel deep shame.
No.386
>>385Never mind the flames.
How's the background looking?
No.389
>>388止めろと言われて止まるような炎なら、ここまで燃え盛ったりしないわよ。あんたに封じられるほど弱くないし、焦っている姿が少し可愛いくらいね。
No.390
>>389Yeah, you're going to play-act Shanghai next time.
No.391
Viscaria's original inspiration: Persona series
Viscaria's amended structure: Detroit: Become Human
No.397
Idea note: Flambery oppai mousepad
No.400
What if Yuu was related to Rinne somehow
No.401
>>400Thinking more, probably too star wars syndrome
No.409
>>408Built a theme around her for 2/14
No.411
>>410I framed it as a light fetish pic, but this is uncannily healing for me to look at.
The canon works, even omake one-offs, are all soaked in so much rape, consumption and "take or be taken" mindset…
I'm no prude over anime smut, but it's sure nice to relax.
No.412
I was thinking about how in Viscaria, say, the ero counters start at zero despite Liedna obviously having masturbated before, etc.
It'd be hilarious if she had gone to confessional in church just prior to the game, and that gives you a clean slate of ero-stats.
No.413
W.D. Howells on
Vanity Fair"Thackeray's hand is heavy through Vanity Fair… and he exults in Becky's decline and fall, as he might not in a maturer work. He is boisterously sarcastic at her expense, as if she were responsible for the defects of her nature and must be punished for her sins as well as by them."
